Schaffer Example

Below is a Schaffer-model sentence students wrote together as a class. The legend at right is for the abbreviations at the beginnings of sentences.

  1. Topic Sentence (TS)
  2. Concrete Detail 1 (CD 1)
  3. Commentary (CM 1A)
  4. Commentary (CM 1B)
  5. Concrete Detail 2 (CD 2)
  6. Commentary (CM 2A)
  7. Commentary (CM 2B)
  8. Concrete Detail 3 (CD 3)
  9. Commentary (CM 3A)
  10. Commentary (CM 3B)
  11. Concluding Sentence (CS)

TSAlthough I generally don’t like it, cafeteria food can sometimes be quite good. CD1To begin with, their fries are tasty. CM1AThey’re good and salty like fries should be. CM1BIf you’re lucky enough to be at the end of the line, you could get some really fresh, crunchy fries as well. CD2The best cafeteria food is during Thanksgiving, when they make turkey and ham. CM2AThe turkey is tender and juicy; CM2Bthe ham tastes just like my grandmother’s. CD3Finally, there’s nothing better than baked spaghetti, and the cafeteria makes this perfectly. CM3AThe cheese on top is at least half a mile thick, and the sauce is better than my mom’s! CM3BThat’s saying a lot, because my mom is Italian. ConclSo while you might not take your date there, the cafeteria can cook some tasty meals!

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